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The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a community center's changes in the last ten years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the changes
of
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in
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 a community
center
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centre
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 over the
last
 decade.
Overall
, there are
a
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some significant
refunctions
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functions
 in the organisations of its interior spaces
as well as
 some certain rooms which have remained the same. By way of comparison, several functional areas have not been
reforms
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 in any kind. The most obvious one is the hall of
this
 center with 100 seats which is still as big as it was 10 years ago.
Moreover
, the other
remaning
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remaining
 places
such
 as the reception, the parking, and the kitchen have the same situation as the main hall, without any redesign. There are,
on the other hand
, some
substantional
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substantial
renovation
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renovations
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 in
this
 reconstruction project including relocation of spaces and deconstruction of walls. On the right side of the plan, the offices in which the site
were
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devided
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divided
 by some walls turned into a spacious cafe area by diminishing the
deviders
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dividers
.
In addition
, the office
located
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is located
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on
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in
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 the south part of
building
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the building
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 on the right side of
reception
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the reception
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community center
  • renovation
  • layout
  • features
  • modifications
  • additions
  • facilities
  • functionality
  • accessibility
  • sustainable initiatives
  • eco-friendly
  • development
  • functional improvements
  • visual enhancements
  • local population
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