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the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present

the following maps show the changes in the area of school from 1990 to present
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The maps below illustrate the changes in the town of Springer from 1970 till now.
Overall
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, currently, there is a noticeable improvement in the area.
It is clear that
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 new buildings
such
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 as apartments, schools and airports were added.
Additionally
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, some of the constructions were shortened and grouped together. In 1970, a big place was taken by a farm which is located on the east side and on the west a large forest was located near the shop which was only one.
Although
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, on the left of the store there was a small house,
while
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 on the right even more tinier accommodation was placed. To add there was one more forest on the east side. In modern times, it is obvious that the previous place which was taken by the farm is shortened as there were added four flats, three shops and one house.
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, the
quantity
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number
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 of living places was shortened to 1 and shops doubled from 1 to 5.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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