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A friend of yours is going on holiday and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter recommend a good place that you have visited before for a holiday say where you went and where you stayed say what you can do there and what the food was like

#friend #holiday #destination #place #food
Dear Chris, I hope you're doing well. It's been a
while
 since we've talked. I am writing in response
for
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 my recommendation for a holiday. As you know,
last
 year, me and my family went to Malta and we were so fascinated and excited, that we are planning to go back there next year. So, my answer to your question will be that country. Let me explain my situation more clearly.
Firstly
, we've been to the hotel Valetta, which is one of the
best reviewed
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 accommodation
centre
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 on the internet.
Furthermore
, it's a 5-star seaside hotel in the
center
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 of the capital city.
Finally
, there are a lot of activities to do and not to get bored,
such
 as sports facilities on the ground floor, like the gym and the swimming pool, which I know you love
it
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.
Besides
this
, there
are
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also
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children
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 playground area inside it. I am looking forward
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 hearing you and I hope you will like it. Lots of love! Your friend, Soso
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Elaboration
Consider adding more detailed descriptions about what makes each recommended activity unique or enjoyable to make your letter more engaging.
Content Completion
Try to expand on the food experience in Malta since it was mentioned in the task but not addressed in your letter.
Greeting and Closing
You provided a well-structured letter with appropriate greeting and closing.
Task Response
You've clearly recommended a destination and explained why, which directly addresses the task requirement.
Paragraph Organization
Your letter was organized with each paragraph discussing a different aspect of the recommendation, showing good coherence and cohesion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • picturesque
  • breathtaking
  • culturally rich
  • accommodations
  • amenities
  • local cuisine
  • adventure sports
  • historical sites
  • memorable experience
  • quaint
  • authentic
  • scenic views
  • hospitality
  • serenity
  • bustling markets
  • authentic dining experience
  • pristine
  • local delicacies
  • vibrant
  • tranquil
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