The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year
The chart compares the countries in terms of estimated
illeteracy
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illiteracy
rates in
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to gender.
It is clear that
the least indicator experienced in developed countries and
the
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South Asia had the highest score. The figures
Africa
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and Arab states were almost equal. In developed countries, nearly 1% of
males
were
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illiterate
and
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for
females
was slightly more than
males
, around 1.5%. Regarding
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Latin
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, the figure for
males
was exactly the same as those for
females
, at around 10%.
Moreover
, around 8% of
males
and 20% of
females
lived in the East Asia and Oceania.
Besides
, the figure for Africa was almost the same as those for Arab states, at about 30% of
males
and 50% of
females
. Turning to South Asia, the indicator of
males
was 34% and
females
had more
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than
males
, with approximately 56%.
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