The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the samw two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the samw two periods.
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The pie charts illustrate the level of satisfaction among the
visitors
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of Ashdown
Museum
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before and after renovation during the same period, breaking down into five different results.
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, before refurbishment, most
visitors
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were dissatisfied with the Ashdown
Museum
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,
while
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the results after refurbishment showed that most people were satisfied with the
museum
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.
Furthermore
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, there has been no change in the number of people who have had no response. Back to the pre-refurbishment period, 40% of
visitors
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were dissatisfied with the
museum
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, 10% more than that satisfied.
Although
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the result depicts that 15% of
visitors
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were very satisfied, 10% were very dissatisfied with the
museum
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. Eventually, 5% said that they had no response. After renovation, the proportion of satisfied
visitors
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rose to 40%, compared to the 15% dissatisfied people.
While
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the number of very satisfied
visitors
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rose by 20% after renovation, the figures for the category of very dissatisfied decreased to 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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