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Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #money #life #planets #waste #earth
According to
 some, money should be spent on research programs looking for the existence of life on other planets
while
 some believe that it is a waste of money, and there are many more important problems on the
Earth
 that need to be addressed.
Although
 it is true that there are a lot of urgent
issues
 on
Earth
 that need to be tackled, I firmly believe that space exploration should be done as it is
also
 very important. An outstanding example of
this
 is the technology that we are using today which is the result of exploration so we should see the wonders of
this
 Universe. Mars is the planet
that is
 explored and signs of life can be seen there as it has some favourable conditions for humans.
For Example
, a recent experiment is under process in which scientists are growing crops on the planets and experiments are done on potatoes. We should explore other planets be there are some people living and through these research programmes we should contact them even some communities of aliens and different creatures may prevail there.
On the other hand
, there are a lot more important
issues
 on
Earth
 like global warming, environmental
issues
, food security and sustainability and the health sector that need government attention and resources government should take notice of these and spend money on these for the betterment of existing people on
Earth
.
To sum up
,
although
 there are many
issues
 that need attention government should
also
 spend a good amount on research programmes.
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Task Achievement
Clarify your position more distinctly in the introduction to make your opinion obvious from the beginning.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Integrate more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments for a stronger effect.
Task Achievement
Be cautious with speculative statements about life on other planets; ensure your discussion is balanced and grounded in scientific possibilities to maintain credibility.
Task Achievement
Good job on presenting a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have a clear essay structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which aids readability.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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