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Some people say that modern innovation brings about more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

#people #innovation
Modern
life
 has changed
activity
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 of
people
 and continues to change. Innovations have both merits and demerits on
people
’s lives.
However
, I believe that it has more benefits than bad sides. First of all, human lives have passed many various stages, and these stages added many new things to human
life
 from the past to the present. Especially with the discovery of the internet makes easier daily work of individuals
.
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easier.
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For example
, in despite of
people
 having difficulties searching
to
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for
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 any information which was needed in the past, individuals may access information when they need it anytime
in
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now, thanks to innovations.
Moreover
,
people
 can chat with relatives or friends from anywhere in the world over the internet
during
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in seconds.
Secondly
, many various machines were invented in the 19th century that these favourable more to a person’s
life
. Especially women do house chores quickly and easily with the help of machines, and in
this
way
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 they can devote enough time to themselves and their families.
For instance
, previously, women used to wash dishes and clothes by hand,
while
 now machines take responsibility for
this
 task. Innovations have more
the
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upsides, and a person’s jobs are made easy in a short time. In conclusion, modern innovation has both detrimental and positive effects on a person’s
life
.
However
, some
people
 argue that innovation leads to a lot of issues
while
 others think that it has more benefits. I totally agree that modern
life
 has contributed to many useful things for
people
 to live well.
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