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A friend of yours has always admired your car. You have now decided to sell it. Write a letter to your friend to ask if he is interested in buying your car. In your letter, -explain why you are selling the car - Describe the good points and any bad points about your car - suggest the friend visits you to see and drive your car

#friend #car #-explain #points #visits #drive
Hello Denis, The reason I am writing to you is to inform you of the fact that I'm going to sell my automobile. Because you are my closest friend and I know how much you love my transport, I think you may be interested in buying it. First of all, I'm selling the automobile just because I want to try something new and more contemporary. My parents agreed to add some money to my capital.
Moreover
, I have recently seen a BMW advertisement for a new family car. It is what I wanted for all my life: big wheels, a new monitor, a blue colour and so on.
Consequently
, I can tell you all about the car. As you know it has an engine in perfect condition, I changed
tyres
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, put in a new monitor and improved speed. There are a lot of minor changes that I can show you in life. Talking about flaws, around the wheels there are minor dents, which you can have fixed easily. Maybe you should change
a
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 steering wheel because I didn't do it so it looks old.
To sum up
, if you are interested in checking the car, I can pick you up tomorrow after 7pm and show you whatever you want. Just let me know. I look forward to your reply. Kseniia
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Improvement
Consider adding more detailed descriptions of both the positive and negative features of your car to enhance the reader's understanding and engagement.
Balance
For an even stronger task response, ensuring all aspects of the prompt are equally weighted can help. In this case, perhaps a bit more on why you are selling the car and a more detailed invitation to your friend to visit and test drive the car could create a more balanced letter.
Tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and personal, which is excellent for this type of correspondence.
Structure
The structure of the letter, with clear paragraphs for introduction, reasons for selling, car details, and an invitation, greatly aids coherence and cohesion.
Clarity
You've effectively used a variety of sentences and expressed ideas clearly, making the letter engaging to read.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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