The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
There is a table which has been done for an explanation, providing data about the underground railway transport proportion among six different
countries
.
According to
the data, it is essential to note that
this
kind of transport system has been the most popular in two
countries
, Paris and Tokyo, with more than one thousand passengers per year.
Firstly
, as it can be observed, the first underground railway station among these 9
countries
was located in London, it was opened in 1863 with an
overall
length of route, equal 394 kilometres, and later
this
trend extended through other
countries
, finished by Los Angeles, where the latest and smallest in the length railway station was constructed at the beginning of the twenty-first century.
Additionally
, as a matter of fact, citizens in Kyoto and Los Angeles preferred
this
view of transportation system at a smaller rate in comparison with other
countries
.
Overall
, in accordance with the provided data, there was a huge economic growth among 9
countries
within 138 years starting from 1863.
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