You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.
In
this
essay
I'll be sharing my opinion on a certain topic which is about Add a comma
essay,
people
thinking that young individuals should have full time
Add a hyphen
full-time
education
until they are at least 18 years old. Well, I think that finishing and focusing on your education
is the most important task or goal to be achieved before turning 18, but this
doesn't mean that people
or young individuals below 18 should only be focusing on their education
because for someone to have somewhat of a good future ahead I think that accuiring
Correct your spelling
acquiring
such
skills is as important if not more important than education
, because in this
new generation
most Add a comma
generation,
people
have the same amount of educational level and what seperates
the successful man from normal Correct your spelling
separates
people
is his uniqueness and unusual knowledge and what I mean by that is
learning to do another things or skills apart from education
. For example
, practicing
certain sports and maybe having the potential of going professional in these sports Change the spelling
practising
such
as football, basketball, or whatever someone wants to do because this
will have a positive impact in
both their body and Change preposition
on
also
their financial situation if going professional was considered. Other things people
can do before turning 18 other than having education
is working. Why Add an article
an education
working
?Wrong verb form
work
,
because working can be helpful to Change the punctuation
apply
accuire
experience and help them level up their social life because communication is so important for Correct your spelling
acquire
people
especially young fellas younger than 18 to develop a well rounded
character so that they can easily be able to communicate and have a comfortable environment with the outside world in their future.Add a hyphen
well-rounded
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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This structure helps in presenting your argument logically and makes your essay easier to follow.
Examples
Include more specific examples to support your argument. This strengthens your essay and makes your viewpoint more convincing.
Content
Try to maintain a balance between discussing educational requirements and exploring other perspectives to fully address the essay prompt.
Focus
Keep your focus on answering the question directly throughout the essay. It's okay to introduce related ideas, but make sure they directly support your stance on the prompt.
Position
Your essay communicates a clear stance on the importance of acquiring skills alongside education.
Examples
The usage of practical examples, like pursuing sports or working, helps in illustrating your point of view.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite