You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

In
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I'll be sharing my opinion on a certain topic which is about
people
thinking that young individuals should have
full time
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education
until they are at least 18 years old. Well, I think that finishing and focusing on your
education
is the most important task or goal to be achieved before turning 18, but
this
doesn't mean that
people
or young individuals below 18 should only be focusing on their
education
because for someone to have somewhat of a good future ahead I think that
accuiring
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acquiring
such
skills is as important if not more important than
education
, because in
this
new
generation
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most
people
have the same amount of educational level and what
seperates
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separates
the successful man from normal
people
is his uniqueness and unusual knowledge and what I mean by
that is
learning to do another things or skills apart from
education
.
For example
,
practicing
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certain sports and maybe having the potential of going professional in these sports
such
as football, basketball, or whatever someone wants to do because
this
will have a positive impact
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both their body and
also
their financial situation if going professional was considered. Other things
people
can do before turning 18 other than having
education
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an education
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is working. Why
working
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?
,
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because working can be helpful to
accuire
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acquire
experience and help them level up their social life because communication is so important for
people
especially young fellas younger than 18 to develop a
well rounded
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character so that they can easily be able to communicate and have a comfortable environment with the outside world in their future.
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Structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. This structure helps in presenting your argument logically and makes your essay easier to follow.
Examples
Include more specific examples to support your argument. This strengthens your essay and makes your viewpoint more convincing.
Content
Try to maintain a balance between discussing educational requirements and exploring other perspectives to fully address the essay prompt.
Focus
Keep your focus on answering the question directly throughout the essay. It's okay to introduce related ideas, but make sure they directly support your stance on the prompt.
Position
Your essay communicates a clear stance on the importance of acquiring skills alongside education.
Examples
The usage of practical examples, like pursuing sports or working, helps in illustrating your point of view.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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