The diagrams show the life cycle of the salmon, from birth to mating and all that lies between. In the first place,
The diagrams show the
life
cycle of the salmon
, from birth to mating and all that lies between.
In the first place, the salmon
start
its Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
life
as an egg in the slow moving
upper reaches, hidden from predators among the reeds. After 5 to 6 months, the egg hatches and the baby Add a hyphen
slow-moving
salmon
, or “fry” begins its journey to the lower river, living in the fast current for four years until it becomes an adolescent. At this
point, known as “smolt”, the adolescent fish will have grown to a size of around 15cm. Then
it migrates to the open sea and starts its 5-year life
there, during which time it finally
develops into adult size (70 to 76cm). After that
it turns around and begins the arduous process of returning upstream to the head of the river, where it will mate, lay eggs and Add a comma
that,
thus
continue the life
cycle anew.
In short, salmon
grow to maturity through three main morphological stages. Each stage takes place in a different aquatic environment. The first two stages occur in freshwater environments, while
the third stage occurs in seawater environments.Submitted by cathyielts22 on
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