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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Asturalian household.The secound chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Asturalian household.The secound chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The first chart illustrates some information about Australian household
energy
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use
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 and the second chart depicts details of the results of
this
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energy
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use
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. the biggest amount of
energy
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use
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used
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 is for heating, and
also
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 water heating in greenhouse gas
emission
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emissions
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.
Australian
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Australians
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use
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 heating
energy
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by
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apply
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42
percent
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 and water heating
by
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apply
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30
percent
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wich
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which
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resulted
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resulted in
resulted from
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 more than once fourth green
house
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houses
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water heating and less than once fourth
heating
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of heating
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.
Othet
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Other
applinces
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appliances
appliance
used
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use
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by
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apply
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15
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percent
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per cent
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 and its
produced
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produce
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 28
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percent
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per cent
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gas
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of gas
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also
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 refrigeration
use
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 by 7
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percent
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per cent
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produced
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producing
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 double
gas
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the gas
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emission
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emissions
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. The
litlest
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littlest
little
amont
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amount
 of
this
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 both
of
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apply
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charts is for lighting and cooling
folowed
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followed
 by 2 and 4
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percent
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per cent
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 of used
energy
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 and has produced 3% cooling and 8% lighting.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, use, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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