share of income earned by top 1 percent, 1975-2015
The line graph delineates the proportion of
income
earned by the top one percent
, namely the United Change the spelling
per cent
States
, the United Kingdom, Canada, Italy, Germany, France and Japan from 1975 to 2015, measured in percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Overall
, there was a progressive growth pattern witnessed in all datasets,with the most drastic hike witnessed in the amount of income
earned in the United States
. In addition
, the proportion of income
in the United States
generally had by far the highest figure throughout the period.
The share of income
in the United States
started at around 7%, after which it saw an exponential climb to under 20% in the year end
detailed. A similar change can be seen in the figure Add a hyphen
year-end
of
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for
income
in the United Kingdom and Canada, which increased from approximately 7% to around 13% in 40 years. The data of
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on
income
in Germany started at above 10%, after which it witnessed a variance between 11% and 8% in 2000,
and a subsequent climb to around 14% in 2015. Remove the comma
apply
Similarly
, the figure for the income
earned in France was at
merely 7%, followed by a slight acceleration to 9%. Change preposition
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Finally
, the data of
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on
income
in both Italy and Japan saw a similar change, increasing from nearly 6% to around 9% in the year end
examined.Add a hyphen
year-end
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