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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and table illustrate the number of
tourists
 from
the
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Asia, Europe,
US
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the US
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 and
other
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others
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 who come
in
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on
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 holiday
for
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to
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 stay at
resort
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a resort
the resort
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 in Australia.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of
the
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Asia
tourists
 is the
most
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highest
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.
While
 the number of Other regions tourist is the smallest. It is apparent that European
tourists
 stay in camping or
caravan
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a caravan
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 for 16
days
 and do
the activity
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activities
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such
 as swimming and sunbathing.
Next,
American
tourists
 like to
sighseeing
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sightseeing
 and living in
four star
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four-star
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hotel
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hotels
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 for 14
days
.
Additionally
,
Tourists
 from other regions have
the
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an
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 average time to stay
about
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of about
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 10
days
 in
camping
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a camping
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 or caravan for surfing in
free
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their free
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 time. And
then
 Asian
tourists
 have the
shorest
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shortest
 living for 7
days
 at
five star
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five-star
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 hotel for sightseeing view of Australia. In conclusion,
in
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apply
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both European
tourists
 and
tourists
 from other regions want to
living
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live
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 in
camping
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a camping
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 or caravan. On
contrary
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the contrary
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, Asia and American
tourist
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tourists
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is
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are
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 popular to stay in
hotel
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hotels
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 and like to do
activity
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activities
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for
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like
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 sightseeing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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