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Band 5.5

Students should pay full cost for their own study, because unversity education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #cost #study #unversity #education #individuals #society
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Many individuals think that we should pay all costs for our education because benefits individuals of
university
 education more than society. I totally agree with
this
 statement. The reasons I will explain in
this
 essay. We can see
university
 has a lot of benefits students who
study
 there can get a deep knowledge of the job they want to work. We can get more knowledge and skill communicate by talking with
Lecturer
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the Lecturer
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 about some question in your lesson because their lecturer is very smart so
there
Correct pronoun usage
they
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 can answer anything you want to ask and they have a high level of
degree
 that you can get some experience from them to use to get a higher
degree
 and you can get sharp arguments by studying from them. In
university
, you can get a good facility to
study
. It can help you have more focus on the lesson and you can understand more the lesson.
Moreover
, you can get more opportunities in
job
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a job
the job
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 or
study
. You can get a high level of servants.
However
, you can get a scholarship to go to a good school in foreign countries maybe you can get a job you love with a high salary in their countries.
In contrast
, there
have
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are
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 some drawbacks.
University
 needs a high fee and it needs a long time to
study
. If you want to
study
 in
university
, you could have a strong mental because you need to be away from home and live alone. And you can meet some people is a bad guys who don't want you to get a high
degree
. In some cases, need you to have
a
Correct article usage
apply
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good skill in self-taught because lecturers don't take care of you because they work to get a salary so they don't help you when you write wrong notes. In conclusion, you can see
university
 has a lot of benefits and it just has a
little
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few
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 drawbacks. It can help you get more knowledge and it can help you get more opportunities in future so I totally agree with
this
 statement. Students should pay the full cost in there to get a
degree
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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