The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.

The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.
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The pie charts
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5 categories of degrees, which were granted at the national university between 1990 and 2010.
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it is clear that
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the proportion of majoring in computer science relatively saw a stable increase over the 30-year
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, meanwhile, it was by far the most for both fields for the whole
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. In 1990, computer science and business showed the largest percentage of majors, roughly 30%. By 2010, the degree of computer science had risen steadily by 15%,
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business had fallen from 30% to 15% respectively.
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Medicine
accounted for 25% approximately at the beginning of the
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the second proportion of degrees for the rest of the
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, around 25%.
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, the shifts in Law declined from 15% to 10% in the first 10 years,
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rose to 15% in 2010. The quantity of
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course and Business grants was the same by 2010.
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  • degrees granted
  • majors
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable trends
  • technological advancements
  • job market demand
  • healthcare policies
  • research breakthroughs
  • economic cycles
  • globalization
  • entrepreneurship trends
  • legislation
  • societal issues
  • international policies
  • academic and professional interests
  • implications
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