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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of magazines
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sold per person in various countries
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 as countries A, B, C, D and E in 2003,with predicted sales for 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the bar chart that the number of magazines in countries A and B is the highest sold.
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 the least sold is
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 E. It is apparent that the amount of mangazine sold in
Country
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 A, B and C
stated at
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 approximately 49, 49 and 38 in 2003, respectively.
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reducing to 45, 47 and 35 in 2005.
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, in 2007 the magazine was sold down to 39, 45 and 32 respectively.
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, the number of magazines in
country
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 D started at 19 in 2003, rising to 20 in 2005. And after that grew to 25 in 2007.
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, In
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 E started at 5 in 2003 and peaked at 8 in the next 2 years. Before down to 5 as equal to 2003 in the year 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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