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The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these cause affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The pie chart in the question illustrates the primary reason why agricultural land
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a declined proportions .
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 , the table gives information about how
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 affected three continents (
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North America ,
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Europe , the Oceania ) in the year 1990s .
Overall
 m as it can be clearly seen that in both figures , there was an upward trend in over-grazing in the first form .
Whereas
 , there was a downward trend in percents
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 total land degraded in
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North America .
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over-grazing and deforestation
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perconts
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percentages
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 , in over-cultivation and others had
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less
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 numbers . In reference to the data in the table ,
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Oceania a marked increase , the others showed a corresponding decline in the
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total
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