It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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. They tend to follow
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behaviors without knowing whether it is
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or bad action. It is becoming crucial for their
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to teach
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to differentiate what is right or wrong from an early age. I would argue that disciplining the
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by giving them
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However
, it is important to note that
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bad
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without traumatizing them and is harmless. There are many bad behaviors that
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from their environment, which they might see from their peers, watch
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or read something online. Those attitudes
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the way they behave or react to certain problems.
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their
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giving them advice they might talk back, or when they
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studying they might skip school without their
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knowing. To tackle
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problem, light
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given by their
parents
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, it can be
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book and conclude
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after reading it so that
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their reading
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. If
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behavior
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alarming,
parents
should give them a substantial sanction.
This
is because the more severe their bad actions are the harder it can be changed.
For instance
, if
children
bully their friends or associate themself with a group of juvenile delinquents, it
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but
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also
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harm others.
That is
why
parents
should take decisive action to discipline their
children
such
as taking away their phone so that they could not communicate with the gang they joined in, of course after apologizing to the victim they bullied.
To sum up
, I believe that every effort should be made to teach
children
good
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from a very young age, and if they behave badly, some
punishment
should be taken to stop their
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, but it is important to note that the
punishment
should not lead to psychological harm to the
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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