The line graph shows visits to and from UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
UK
citizens who had visited foreign countries
as well as
how many
visitors
there were to the
UK
from other states between 1979 to 1999. The bar chart provides information about 5 top states visited by British
residents
in 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an increase in the number of
visitors
to and from the
UK
and there were more visits abroad by
UK
residents
than visits to the
UK
by overseas
residents
over the period.
Furthermore
, the most popular country to visit by
UK
residents
was France in 1999.
According to
the line graph in 1979 tourism by
a
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foreign citizens to the
UK
began with 10 million
visitors
,
Then
, increased gradually until hit its peak in 1999 with 28 million tourists. In comparison to that visits to the
UK
by overseas
residents
were approximately 10
millions
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in 1979 and after that period experienced a slight increase and
then
rose sharply to about 30 million
visitors
in 1999.
Moreover
, France was the most preferred destination for
UK
residents
in 1999 followed by Spain,USA and Greece. Meanwhile, Turkey was the less attractive destination chosen to visit by British people.
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