Some people think eating meat is bad for health . To extend do you agree or disagree.
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scintestic
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scientistic
resourches
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resources
researchers
lot
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lot of
osf
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of
meats
would be harmful Fix the agreement mistake
meat
stomached
and Replace the word
stomach
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cardiovascular
system
of individuals .
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systems
Although
meat
provide
us with Change the verb form
provides
essential
to our body ,it might Fix the agreement mistake
essentials
be
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apply
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cause
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cause
agensy
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agency
Firstly
numerous people
in the world several
types of meats Add a missing verb
have several
such
as chiken
,beef and other types .But the Correct your spelling
chicken
meat
of beef and chicken are the most preffered
. Correct your spelling
preferred
Morever
, many Correct your spelling
Moreover
considered
that eating Wrong verb form
consider
meat
has got
harmful sides Verb problem
apply
for
our Change preposition
on
health
.Although
when people
eat meat
theyt feel relaxed but
it is not Correct word choice
apply
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beneficial
benifical
and it may Correct your spelling
beneficial
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cause
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cause
agensy
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agency
also
they can gain a lot
of weight . For example
in
the world has Change preposition
apply
got
a Verb problem
apply
lot
of junk foods and 70 percent
of these meals Change the spelling
per cent
is consisted
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consist
undercooked
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of undercooked
meat
. W orkers
and students prefer those Correct your spelling
Workers
food
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foods
becouse
they do not have enough time for cooking . Correct your spelling
because
Therefore
eating lots of meat
is not advised by so many people
. When humans eat lesss
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less
meat
they can live longer .
On the other hand
more and more people
like meat
dishes and always like fried meat
or food
cooked in ghee . Not only fried meat
or other fried foods are harmful to humans
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human
health
. Turuning
to Correct your spelling
Turning
health
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healthy
food
. Steamed and boiled foods are usefull
for Correct your spelling
useful
health
. Such
as korean and japan people
preffer
and Correct your spelling
prefer
also
eat boiled and steamed food
. Again salads also
healthy Add a missing verb
are also
food
. If people
eat every time boiled
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,
food
the most popular one boiled
risk.
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is boiled
conculison
,when numerous Correct your spelling
conclusion
lot
fried meals it is harmful to their health
. If people
eating
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eat
boilde
meals or salad Correct your spelling
boiled
bolide
and
steamed Correct word choice
apply
this
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causes
couses
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causes
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