The line graph shows the number of players in four different sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.
The line graph below illustrates the sum of participants in different outdoor games in a European country from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, there are four kinds of sports such
as basketball, tennis
, badminton and rugby. It is clear that
the top-ranked are tennis
and rugby, meanwhile other
two categories had Correct article usage
the other
an
unchanged stability for years.
Remove the article
apply
Firstly
, in 1985, soccer had a the
highest number of players Choose an article
the
by
demonstrating approximately 240, Change preposition
apply
while
tennis
had a
150 people. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Nevertheless
, after 10 years the first one went down slightly to 100 and the second one had an
noticeable increase Change the article
a
as
200 individuals, Change preposition
of
hence
, these two had an equal result .In 2005, rugby had a dramatic decrease , in the mean time
Correct your spelling
meantime
tennis
had a significant rise.
Secondly
,in 1985, basketball had 80 sportsmens
, Correct your spelling
sportsmen
while
badminton only
50. Add a missing verb
had only
Additionally
, they stayed without any change for 20 years.Submitted by aizered097 on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis with synonyms.
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