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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express their thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Certain individuals believe that artists need freedom of expression to develop and showcase their skills. I overwhelmingly agree with
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 a plethora of reasons and examples will be explored to prove my opinion.
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 has helped many creators to demonstrate their abilities on
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social media platforms. The ideas flow freely in the communities when people are not bound
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 many criticised and even punished them. Some of them were isolated from
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 and others were murdered in the outburst of
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 by the irrational followers of
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 concept. Ergo, the lack of tolerance causes
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independence
 of the creative people in the world which in turn reduces the free flow of thoughts.
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favour of racism which creates distinction in the community. In the past, in India, numerous authors wrote against some castes that promoted untouchability and some sections of the communities faced treatment as inferior citizens.
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 degree of freedom in the world.
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checks and balances.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • creativity
  • freedom of expression
  • innovative
  • ethical considerations
  • societal morals
  • unregulated
  • provoke thought
  • controversy
  • government regulation
  • censorship
  • diverse perspectives
  • artistic expression
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