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The diagram show how one type of coal is used to produce electricity

The diagram show how one type of coal is used to produce electricity
The picture depicts information about one of the coal functions utilized to create electricity.
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, there are eight stages beginning with the collection of raw coal from the mine and the end with creating electricity from
as
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 power factory. Having looked at carefully the picture given for more details,
firstly
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 the big coal digging from the mine. After that, the first product is ground smaller and transferred to the first company. At there, all processing coal is gasified the
gas
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 which is stored at another organization. In the next step, the
gas
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 is cooled and the dirt is removed to form a cleaning product and releases waste heat to the environment. All new forms of
gas
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 are put in storage at the new plant.
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, the cleaning product is moved to the final place to make the power
gas
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 which is ready to use. There are two ways to provide electricity from the power
gas
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: one is used at residents’ houses and factories.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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