Not enough people realise the importance of natural world. What is the reason for people’s lack of awareness? How can people be made more aware?

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Most
people
have
yet
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not yet
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realized the
essential
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essentials
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of
world
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the world
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of nature.
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essay will
dicuss
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discuss
the reason for
people
's empty-headedness and the
adresses
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addresses
to make
people
become more aware. First of all, in many countries,
people
tend to
prioritze
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prioritise
economic growth and technological development over environmental preservation, forgetting the crucial role the natural world plays in human life.
For instance
, in Viet Nam, many
people
in remote areas live on selling wood from cutting down trees,
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which lead
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lead
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leads
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to soil erosion and
also
cause
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causes
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flood
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more easily because there are no trees in the area to prevent the flood.
In addition
,
people
too
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care about themselves
that
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doing harm to the environment unintentionally.
For example
, mature prefer going to work by their personal vehicle to
going
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to work by using public transport.
This
sounds harmless but the more
people
use their own car to work, the more
vehicle
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vehicles
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appear on the road leading to the increase in carbon emission.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental conservation
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • overwhelming flow of information
  • sensational news topics
  • environmental education
  • media campaigns
  • environmental degradation
  • core curriculum
  • social media influencers
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • community projects
  • hands-on involvement
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