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The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, and 2015.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, and 2015.
#bar #percentage #school #children #instruments
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indicated
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about
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learning to play four different musical instruments
of
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school children in
term
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 of
percentage
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percentages
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 between 2005
to
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and
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 2015. First of all, The musical instruments consist of violin, guitar,
paino
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piano
 and drums.
Guitar
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The guitar
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 is the highest
percent
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per cent
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in
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of
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the
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apply
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one
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apply
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of musical
instuments
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instruments
 that we could see it
was
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dramatically increased from
in
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2005 to 2015 that was 12%, 20% and 27% respectively. Similar to Piano was slightly increased in 2005 to 2015 from 11%,17% and 25% .
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, Drum and Violin
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steadily increased
since
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from
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 2005 to 2015 . In conclusion, the
most
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musical
instument
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instrument
instruments
 that students love to play
was
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 guitar and piano but drums and violin
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were
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 less
amout
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amount
 of
interest
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an interest
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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