The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instruments in 2005, 2010, and 2015.
The given bar chart
indicated
Wrong verb form
indicates
about
learning to play four different musical instruments Change preposition
apply
of
school children in Change preposition
apply
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
percentage
between 2005 Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
to
2015.
First of all, The musical instruments consist of violin, guitar, Correct word choice
and
paino
and drums. Correct your spelling
piano
Guitar
is the highest Add an article
The guitar
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
in
Change preposition
of
the
Change the article
apply
one
of musical Correct pronoun usage
apply
instuments
that we could see it Correct your spelling
instruments
was
dramatically increased from Unnecessary verb
apply
in
2005 to 2015 that was 12%, 20% and 27% respectively. Similar to Piano was slightly increased in 2005 to 2015 from 11%,17% and 25% .
Change preposition
apply
In contrast
, Drum and Violin were
steadily increased Unnecessary verb
apply
since
2005 to 2015 .
In conclusion, the Change preposition
from
most
musical Correct quantifier usage
apply
instument
that students love to play Correct your spelling
instrument
instruments
was
guitar and piano but drums and violin Correct subject-verb agreement
were
was
less Correct subject-verb agreement
were
amout
of Correct your spelling
amount
interest
.Correct article usage
an interest
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