The charts below give information about attendance at entertainment venues and admission prices to those venues in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows how many tickets were sold to sports events,

theme

parks

and movies in 2009 and the table reveals ticket prices to various venues in the same year. Going to the cinema was both the most popular and the cheapest form of entertainment in 2009. Cinemas attracted more people than

theme

parks

and sports combined. Whilst 1,050,000 people attended movies, only a third of that number visited

theme

parks

, and a mere 150,000 went to sports games. Movie tickets were far cheaper than other forms of entertainment. Attendance at a football game in 2009 cost around $73, with little reduction for families. Basketball and cricket games cost less, at $34 and $24 respectively for a single admission.

However

, a family ticket to cricket, at $80, showed considerable savings.

Theme

parks

were only slightly less expensive than football matches at $70 a single, but there was a significant reduction in the price of a family concession with four people gaining entry for the price of three. Movie tickets at $15 for one, and $55 for four, were the cheapest.

Overall

, the cinema was the most affordable entertainment option.

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