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Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports events has some problems that benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some countries believe that hosting a global sports
event
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 negatively affects them,
whereas
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 others think that it is beneficial for the sake of their country. Both ideas have valid reasons,
however
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, the problems that come with a big
event
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 are not big enough to make
people
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 ignore the benefits. International sports competitions support the economy of placeholders by making crowded spectator groups and sports communities visit the
event
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 place.
Moreover
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, the
people
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 who visit are likely to talk about the places they have been and what types of activities they have done
while
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 being there.
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, a friend of mine had a trip to Italy, Milan. The more stories he told the more I was eager to visit Italy.
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, getting too many visitors is not something that all countries can handle or afford. After all, hosting an
event
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 comes with a price and its budget is not cheap or affordable for most countries. It is important to evaluate the pros and cons, before wasting most likely necessary and needed money. In
this
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 case, attracting large groups of
people
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 might turn into a nightmare and a disaster. To summarize, even though, it is a big and beneficial opportunity for a country to be selected or let to host and attract large groups of
people
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 into visiting and sightseeing the places, beauties of their culture and tastes of their food, hosting
such
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 big
event
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 may not be more than wasting money and resources if it is not handleable task for the country.

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Task Response
Ensure to equally discuss both views before expressing your opinion to create a balanced argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of linking words to enhance the flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples to illustrate your points and make your argument more compelling.
Introduction and Conclusion
You have effectively introduced the topic and provided a clear conclusion, which helps to structure your essay well.
Logical Structure
The essay is logically organized, with a clear progression of ideas throughout.
Supported Main Points
Your discussion includes relevant details that support the main points, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • National pride
  • Fosters
  • International relations
  • Bolsters
  • Economic gains
  • Economic burden
  • Long-term debt
  • Infrastructure improvements
  • Cultural exchange
  • Mutual understanding
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Commercialization
  • Gentrification
  • Displacing
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