Student should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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cost
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study should be paid by students
due to
the personal benefits of
university
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a university
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education.
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author
agree
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with
this
statement because knowledge in
university
just
serve
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for
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individuals
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future
and
unversity
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university
simply
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is simply
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a
service
.
First,
university
education just
serve
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serves
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for students
future
. In order words, they gain knowledge about their
future
career from
unversity
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university
in order to help them survive in society in the
future
. So
that
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,
this
is just a personal purpose,
doesn't
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and doesn't
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benefit
association
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the association
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.
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illustrate
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illustrates
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that many people nowadays
said
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say
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that they study
inversity
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university
diversity
to serve
for
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theirself
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themselves
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in the
future
.
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Furthermore
,
university
simply
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a
service
and people have to pay
money
to use that
service
. To explain, in
university
,
student
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students
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can choose what they want to learn and the career that they want to have.
Moreover
,
unversities
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universities
also
need
money
to remain active and
upgrate
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upgrade
their facilities. So, basically,
this
system
just
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is just
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like many other services and
student
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students
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have to pay a sum of
money
to use it, obviously. In conclusion, students have to pay all
cost
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costs
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for their
study
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studies
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because
unversity
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university
education just
serve
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serves
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for
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apply
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their
future
and it simply a
service
so it still
need
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needs
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money
to remain operating and
upgrate
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upgrade
their
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its
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facilities.
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task response
Your essay presents a clear position throughout, but could be improved by developing your ideas more fully with further explanations and a variety of examples.
coherence and cohesion
There are logical connections between your main ideas, but the essay would benefit from more effective use of linking words and phrases to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
language use
Try to diversify your vocabulary to avoid repetition and to make your argument more persuasive. Using a wider range of vocabulary can also demonstrate your language skills more effectively.
structure
You have successfully structured your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in organizing your thoughts clearly.
task response
You managed to sustain a clear position throughout the essay, addressing the prompt directly. This shows a good understanding of the task at hand.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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