Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Evidence suggests that buying products is a growing trend and is

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undeniable part of everyone in their daily life.

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there are a number of benefits involved in

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approach, the drawbacks are by no means negligible. On the plus side. there are some advantages in purchasing a wide range of

product

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for

people

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with, it brings prosperity. simply put, in

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hectic pace of life most of the society do not have enough time or opportunity to provide

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needs so buying them is the only logical

choise

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choice

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, most of the public do not have time and access to

farm lands

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in order to cultivate their own food and it is easier to buy them from a grocery store.

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, it

creats

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creates

entrpreneurship

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entrepreneurship

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, to provide and prepare products a significant amount of workforce is needed which

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need leads to more job opportunities for citizens. Many companies and

manufactures

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have appeared

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trend and many workers are occupied with a decent job in these places.

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, the downside cannot be ignored. The most axiomatic argument is concerned with the environmental impact of

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practic

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to say, companies consume a huge amount of

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fuel

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as electricity, gas and oil and use them to provide

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energy for their devices which causes releasing more carbon dioxide into the air and most of their residue is abandoned in the

envitonment

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environment

or the sea.

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, consuming culture

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prevalents

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prevalent

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more than ever.

people

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toughts

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thoughts

are manipulated by plenty of advertising to be convinced that they want to buy something that they do not really need.

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, having a closet full of various clothes is

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essential

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this

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is the value of their life.

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, consumer culture can be both rewarding and problematic.

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trend may help nations to access their vital needs immediately and provide job opportunities, it is highly likely that

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phenomenon harms

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and cultivates false ideas in

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's minds

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Consider refining the introduction and conclusion to more clearly state your viewpoint on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Task Response

Effectively addresses both advantages and disadvantages of the topic.

Task Achievement

Uses examples well to support main points.

Coherence & Cohesion

Maintains a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

343 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

mass production
consumerism
economic growth
environmental degradation
natural resources
overconsumption
waste management
landfill
social inequality
materialism
financial strain
mental well-being
quality of life
job creation
productivity
pollution
deforestation

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