Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Evidence suggests that buying products is a growing trend and is
a
undeniable part of everyone in their daily life. Change the article
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Although
there are a number of benefits involved in this
approach, the drawbacks are by no means negligible.
On the plus side. there are some advantages in purchasing a wide range of product
for Fix the agreement mistake
products
people
. To begin
with, it brings prosperity. simply put, in this
hectic pace of life most of the society do not have enough time or opportunity to provide their
needs so buying them is the only logical Change preposition
for their
choise
to Correct your spelling
choice
choose
do
. Verb problem
make
For example
, most of the public do not have time and access to farm lands
in order to cultivate their own food and it is easier to buy them from a grocery store. Correct your spelling
farmlands
Furthermore
, it creats
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creates
entrpreneurship
. Correct your spelling
entrepreneurship
That is
, to provide and prepare products a significant amount of workforce is needed which this
need leads to more job opportunities for citizens. Many companies and manufactures
have appeared Correct your spelling
manufacturers
due to
this
trend and many workers are occupied with a decent job in these places.
However
, the downside cannot be ignored. The most axiomatic argument is concerned with the environmental impact of this
practic
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practice
That is
to say, companies consume a huge amount of fules
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fuel
such
as electricity, gas and oil and use them to provide necessary
energy for their devices which causes releasing more carbon dioxide into the air and most of their residue is abandoned in the Add an article
the necessary
envitonment
or the sea. Correct your spelling
environment
On the other hand
, consuming culture Add a missing verb
is prevalents
prevalents
more than ever. Correct your spelling
prevalent
prevalence
people
's toughts
are manipulated by plenty of advertising to be convinced that they want to buy something that they do not really need. Correct your spelling
thoughts
For instance
, having a closet full of various clothes is essentioal
for Correct your spelling
essential
people
who are believed
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believe
this
is the value of their life.
To conclude
, consumer culture can be both rewarding and problematic. While
this
trend may help nations to access their vital needs immediately and provide job opportunities, it is highly likely that this
phenomenon harms environment
and cultivates false ideas in Add an article
the environment
people
's mindsSubmitted by m.tavasoli18 on
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