There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st century, advancements

due to

globalization

has

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affected

all most

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all sectors

through out

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the world.

Accordingly

, many opportunities have been created to bring people, businesses

as well as

regions together.

Although

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there are some

criticism

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towards

this

approach,

vast

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area of its pros can not be overlooked.

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essay will support the current trends of

globalization

Firstly

, if we look

around

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the things near us, most of the them are results

due to

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concepts of

the

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globalization

For example

, consider the

zoom

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platform, it was

initially

developed in order to communicate business ideas among business people, but after the

Covid 19

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pandemic situation, almost all the educational institutions

adopt

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this

platform to continue

the

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academic activities. The students who

got

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the

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benefit from that shift may be from

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families who

opposes

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the

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globalization

Thus

, it is every individual's duty to support it rather than

blocking

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the way of progress.

Moreover

as a result

of international influence,

life styles

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lifestyles

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of people

has

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been drastically enhanced.

For instance

pharmaceutical

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the pharmaceutical

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industry has come up with many medicines that can cure so

much

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diseases that were considered to be incurable in the past

such

as Tuberculosis

due to

the exchange

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information through research findings. If we could not afford

such

drugs, most of the

citizen

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in the under-developed countries would have

dead

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. In conclusion, it should be noted that

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it is the duty of each person to help in improving foreign affairs rather than opposing it. By doing so,

every body

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can get the full advantage out

from

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it.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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260 words

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