There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the 21st century, advancements
due to
globalization
has
affected Change the verb form
have
all most
all sectors Correct your spelling
almost
through out
the world. Correct your spelling
throughout
Accordingly
, many opportunities have been created to bring people, businesses as well as
regions together. Although
,
there are some Remove the comma
apply
criticism
towards Fix the agreement mistake
criticisms
this
approach, vast
area of its pros can not be overlooked. Add an article
a vast
the vast
This
essay will support the current trends of globalization
.
Firstly
, if we look around
the things near us, most of the them are results Change preposition
at
due to
concepts of Change preposition
of
the
Correct article usage
apply
globalization
. For example
, consider the zoom
platform, it was Capitalize word
Zoom
initially
developed in order to communicate business ideas among business people, but after the Covid 19
pandemic situation, almost all the educational institutions Add a hyphen
Covid-19
adopt
Wrong verb form
have adopted
this
platform to continue the
academic activities. The students who Correct article usage
apply
got
Verb problem
apply
the
benefit from that shift may be from Correct article usage
apply
the
families who Correct article usage
apply
opposes
Change the verb form
oppose
the
Correct article usage
apply
globalization
. Thus
, it is every individual's duty to support it rather than blocking
the way of progress.
Wrong verb form
block
Moreover
, as a result
of international influence, life styles
of people Correct your spelling
lifestyles
has
been drastically enhanced. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
For instance
, pharmaceutical
industry has come up with many medicines that can cure so Add an article
the pharmaceutical
much
diseases that were considered to be incurable in the past Change the quantifier
many
such
as Tuberculosis due to
the exchange in
information through research findings. If we could not afford Change preposition
of
such
drugs, most of the citizen
in the under-developed countries would have Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
dead
.
In conclusion, it should be noted thatReplace the word
died
,
it is the duty of each person to help in improving foreign affairs rather than opposing it. By doing so, Remove the comma
apply
every body
Correct your spelling
everybody
,
can get the full advantage out Remove the comma
apply
from
it.Change preposition
of
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Grammar
Be mindful of verb tenses to ensure consistency and clarity.
Grammar
Revise the usage of articles (a, an, the) for accuracy.
Coherence
Use transition words or phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Task Response
Support your ideas with more diversified examples and evidence for stronger argumentation.
Structure
Consider refining your introduction and conclusion to more clearly state your opinion and summarise your argument.
Content
Effective use of examples to support arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear structure and logical flow of ideas.
Task Response
Addresses the task with a clear position throughout the essay.
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