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The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the statistics regarding Australian employee numbers in the previous year, categorized by occupation type and gender.
Overall
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, it can be seen that males percentage outnumbered females in all categories, except for professionals and clerical.
To begin
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 with, the majority of males worked in the trade field about 900,000
people
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, nine times over females in
this
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 sector. Clerical ranked in second place with roughly 850,000
people
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. Meanwhile, other types showed an average
number
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 of 550,000
people
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, with labourers experiencing the lowest figure for male workers, representing only 400,000
people
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. Regarding women employees, it witnessed the highest
number
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 in the clerical, just under 1,000,000
people
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. Followed closely by professionals at exactly 700,000
people
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. The remaining displayed less
number
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 compared to men. Semi-professionals, Labourers, and managers saw figures between 200,000 and 400,000,
whereas
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 tradespeople and production were the two least fields Australian women worked in. It shared a similar
number
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 of 100,000
people
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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