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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015.
#households #income
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Overall
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, there are five ranges of yearly
income
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 presented. Families with an annual
income
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 of 100,000
USD
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 or more in 2015 had the highest figure at 33
million
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households
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. Meanwhile, the smallest group was the families with annual
income
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 of 75,000
USD
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 to 99,999
USD
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 in 2007, accounting for 14
million
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households
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.
First,
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the number of
households
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 having the highest
income
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 which was greater or equal to 100,000
USD
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 fluctuated during the period. It slightly decreased from 29
million
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 in 2007 to 27
million
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 in 2011 and it rose to 33
million
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 in 2015.
Second,
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the number of families having
income
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 ranged from 75,000
USD
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 to 99,999
USD
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 slightly changed. It went down from 14
million
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 in 2007 to 13
million
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 in 2011.
Then
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, it went up to 15
million
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 in 2015.
Third,
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the
households
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 having
income
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 greater or equal to 50,000
USD
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 but less than 75,000
USD
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 remained unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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