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What are advantages and disadvantages of living in rural areas?

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On the one hand, residing in
country sides
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the countryside
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 provides a peaceful environment for
people
 with
a
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great access to leafy places and clean water.
For example
, in urban
areas
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areas,
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 agricultural products have been affected by toxic waste and other chemicals that cause many diseases and health problems
such
 as cancer and heart attacks in urban citizens.
Secondly
, in rural regions affordable housing and low cost of living make beneficial opportunities for
people
.
For instance
, in rural communities population density is lower than
the
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 city so it
makes
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 less demand for housing
therefore
people
 will have homes cheaper.
Thus
, there are attractive reasons why
people
 decide to move to rural places.
On the other hand
, moving to
countryside
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the countryside
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 has negative aspects
such
 as not having access to great malls and health
centers
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centres
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.
For instance
, local bazaars are providing some local goods there.
Moreover
, the scale of businesses
are
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 quite small and scarce jobs are available
to attend
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for a living.
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Begin with a clear thesis statement in your introduction to provide a strong foundation for your argument.
complete response
Expand on the disadvantages of living in rural areas with more detail and examples to maintain a balanced discussion.
logical structure
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance cohesion and fluency between sentences and paragraphs.
introduction conclusion present
Incorporate a concluding paragraph that summarizes your main points and provides a final perspective on the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
Presented clear advantages with relevant examples, demonstrating a good understanding of the essay topic.
logical structure
Maintained a logical flow of ideas, making it easy to follow your argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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