Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree ore disagree ?

One of the most controversial issues today relates to the financial aspect of cultural and historical attractions that tourists and locals have to endure. In
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essay, I am going to examine
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question from both points of view. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that the benefits of tourist attraction
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considerably outweigh their disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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is that it supports the local economy. It is
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possible to say that cultural and historical attractions
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benefit their owners, generating enormous profits. One good illustration of
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is the high
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of museum entrances in cities like Paris or Amsterdam.
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, it is
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possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that, in fact, tourists should pay more for
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type of activity. People often have
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opinion because they tend to think that they
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pay as much for the reason that it is part of their culture. A second point is that people usually think cultural and historical activities are overpriced. A particularly good example here is that in some countries, even the locals refuse to attend
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places just because of the high
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. As we have seen, there are no easy answers to
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that foreigners ought to pay a little extra for those cultural and historical attractions,
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I tend to believe the
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prices
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should be lowered.

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clarity
Task response: The essay gives both sides and a stance, but the final view is a bit unclear. State your main point clearly in the last sentence.
structure
Coherence and cohesion: Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
examples
Use more precise examples and a few facts to back points. The city examples help but add a number or rule.
structure
Clear layout with introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
language use
Good use of linking phrases like 'On one side' and 'On the other hand'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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