It’s better to buy just a few expensive clothes rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, lots of
people
are tend
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to buy
an
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expensive
clothes
instead
of getting a lot of cheaper
clothes
.
This
essay will agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
,
this
will discuss
on
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how the
quality
of the
clothes
is more important than the quantity of the
clothes
.
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that, it will discuss how
people
are attracted towards
the
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expensive
brands
. In the current situation, the
quality
of the dresses
are
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determined
determained
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determined
by
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their
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its
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their
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price. As
quality
is
important
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more important
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than quantity, nowadays the
quality
of
the
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expensive
clothes
are
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is
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better when compared to
the
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cheaper
clothes
. I will be the best example for the scenario. Previously I used to buy a lot of
clothes
which were available for
the
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cheaper price.
As a result
of
this
, these
clothes
losted
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lost
me for only a couple of months. After analysing
this
, I
have
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bought
an
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some
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expensive
clothes
and checked how long I was using
that
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them
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. Surprisingly, the
clothes
which I
has
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bought for
the
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a
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higher price
losted
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lost
me for
upto
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up to
six months, which is equivalent to buying
the
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cheaper
clothes
for
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every two months.
On the other hand
, the majority of the
people
are
attaracted
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attracted
towards buying the
clothes
from
a well known
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well known brands
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brands
such
as GUCCI, Michael Kors etc. The recent survey, which was taken among the
differents
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brands
of
clothes
says that
,
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the number of items that are sold on the
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brands
are
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is
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tremendously higher than the other
brands
. Even though the
quality
of the products
are
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the same,
people
are attracted towards the well
know
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brands
. In conclusion, the
quality
of the
clothes
are
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is
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more important than the
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quantity
quanity
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quantity
of the
clothes
.
As a result
of
this
, the expensive
clothes
is
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are
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of higher
quality
when compared to the cheaper
clothes
.
Although
the expensive
brands
are more popular,
people
should try to explore different
brands
.
As a result
of
this
, the opportunity
of
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the other
brands
will be increased.
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