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The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.

The bar chart below gives information about the sales of electric cars in china, Europe and the United States between 2016 and 2023.
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The bar chart
show
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 the data that China has
been
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sold an
electrics
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electric
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 car to Europe and The United
state
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States
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 of America during the
year
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years
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of
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apply
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2016 to 2023. From the information shown that has been increased. From the start of selling of
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electrics,
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electrics
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electric
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car
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cars
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 has
been
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slightly increased in
first
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the first
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 four
years
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 and dramatically rising
up
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in up
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last
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 three
years
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. China is the
kargest
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largest
 market of people who
is
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 using
then
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European
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Europe
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. The smallest market
is
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in
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 America and it has been
flctuate
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fluctuate
 d since they are starting
selling
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. From the
begining
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beginning
 China was the first nation that was
highier
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higher
that
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than
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 others,
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 and steadily
beteewn
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over
 three
years
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, After all extremely increased in past three
years
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 reached
in
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the top. Europe was slightly
inceasing
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increasing
 and dramatically rising up in
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last
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the last
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 of the
preriod
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previous
 time. United
State
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States
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,
the
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is the
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 only
one
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apply
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of
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country
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the country
a country
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 that has been
fluctauted
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fluctuated
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 in between
of
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apply
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the population to
made
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make
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 a
dicision
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decision
 all about to
using
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use
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the
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electics
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electrics
electric
 cars.
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 once they prepared was slightly increasing and being popular for selling into the market.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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