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The bar graph shows the number of man and woman participants in the olympics between 1924 to 2012

The bar graph shows the number of man and woman participants in the olympics between 1924 to 2012
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There are two graphs giving information on the
number
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 of
participants
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 in the Olympics from 1924 to 2012. The bar chart indicates the
number
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 of athletes by
genders
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gender
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, and the line graph illustrates the total
number
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 of people
took
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who took
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 part in the Olympics over the period. In General, male
participants
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 outnumbered female
participants
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 in the four years, 1924, 1952, 1984 and 2012. It is
also
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 clear to see that the total
number
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 of Olympic sports players kept an upward trend over the nine decades. In 1924, there were almost 3000 men
athelets
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athletes
participated
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who participated
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the
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in the
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Olympic
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Olympics
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wheras
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whereas
 only approximately one hundred women
athelets
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athletes
 competed in the same year. In the later three years, the figure of male
participants
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 grew gradually and reached nearly 6000 in the year
of
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2012. The figure
of
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for
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 female
participants
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 followed the same pattern,
however
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, its increase from 1984 to 2012 was dramatic, from 1500 to about 3800.
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, as a whole, the total
number
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 went up steadily from just over 3000 in 1924 to about 6500 in 1984, and
then
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 it soared to 11000 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender ratio
  • inclusion
  • significant gap
  • gradual increase
  • key Olympics
  • notable increase
  • policy changes
  • closing gender gap
  • socio-political factors
  • feminist movements
  • gender equality
  • parity
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