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The line graph show the number of visitors in 4 particular place in Vietnam from 1980 to 2020

The line graph show the number of visitors in 4 particular place in Vietnam from 1980 to 2020
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The given line graph demonstrates that
people
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 visited 4 different destinations in Vietnam between 1980 and 2020.
Overall
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, it can be obviously seen
people
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 visiting the exhibition
along with
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 the pagoda increased
while
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 the
museum
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 and public park went down over the given period.
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,
although
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 the
museum
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 had the most
visitors
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 in the beginning, it was eventually replaced by the pagoda. Looking toward two special places in Vietnam where
people
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 visited the exhibition at least in 1980, around 10,000
visitors
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, before rapidly going up to reach a peak of 110 000
visitors
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 by 2000, but
then
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 it gradually dropped to almost 80 000
visitors
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 in 2010 and remained steady until the period end. Meanwhile,
people
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 visiting the pagoda had a significant jump from 10000 in 1980 to nearly 90000 in 2020, becoming the most destination
people
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 were likely to visit. Regarding the remaining places the
museum
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 and the park started at exactly 100000 and 30000
visitors
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 in 1980 prior to declining sharply to roughly 30000 and 20000
visitors
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 in 2020. As for the
museum
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, it continued to grow minimally before dropping down to 30000
visitors
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 again
at the end
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 of the period.
Similarly
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, the public park saw a noticeable decrease to just under 5000
visitors
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 in 2000.
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