If the product is good and consumer needs then advertising is unnecessary. To what extent to you agree?

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Getting a good
quality
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product
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in the market is
such
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a blessing.
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the end,
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the Manufacturer
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and the consumer both
feels
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happy. I do agree,
what
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with what
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the statement says here. I will provide my reasons and examples in the next paragraphs. Today, we see different
type
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types
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of markets with different products, available from all over the world. We often do not get
the
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a
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good
quality
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product
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easily. We visit different shops and the
product
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we
finally
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like in
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the contract
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, with
it's
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quality
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and price, we end up buying that
product
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. When you take the
product
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at home you yourself
done
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do
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the advertising of that
product
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by telling
people
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that
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apply
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I got
this
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product
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from Niranjan's shop and
it's
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its
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quality
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is very good, I liked it and when
people
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listen to
feedback
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the feedback
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of
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on
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the
product
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from your mouth, they
also
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visit the same shop and they buy the
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.
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, You wanted a cooler
from
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for
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many months and you tried visiting different shops in your city area
and
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apply
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finally
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one day you
get
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got
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a cooler of your choice and you
definietly
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definitely
liked the
quality
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of
a
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the
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cooler and you purchased it from
seller
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the seller
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. Whenever
people
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visit your house and when their eye catches
this
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product
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, they ask you different questions regarding
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the
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product
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like from where
did
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apply
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you
purchase
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purchased
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it and what is the price of the
product
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, even
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if we
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we
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you
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also
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want to buy it. Like
this
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, advertising is happening automatically. Having more consumers attracted towards a specific
product
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,
it
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apply
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does not need advertising. If the
quality
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of
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product
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the product
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is good
then
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people
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will automatically get
attract
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towards
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the
a
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product
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.
People
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itself
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themselves
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becomes
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become
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an advertisement of the
product
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because they are going to give the feedback of
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product
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the product
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to other
people
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whoever
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who
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have asked about it. In conclusion, good
quality
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products
does
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do
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not need any type of advertisement, the consumer will automatically buy the
product
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based on the feedback it got from another consumer.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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