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f the product is good and consumer needs then advertising is unnecessary. To what extent to you agree?

#f #product #consumer
Getting a good
quality
product
 in the market is
such
 a blessing. In the end, the Manufacturer and the consumer both feel happy. I do agree, with what the statement says here. I will provide my reasons and examples in the next paragraphs. Today, we see different types of markets with different products, available from all over the world. We often do not get a good
quality
product
 easily. We visit different shops and the
product
 we
finally
 like in the contract, with its
quality
 and price, we end up buying that
product
. When you take the
product
 at home you yourself do the advertising of that
product
 by telling
people
 t I got
this
product
 from Niranjan's shop and its
quality
 is very good, I liked it and when
people
 listen to the feedback on the
product
 from your mouth, they
also
 visit the same shop and they buy the
product
.
For example
, You wanted a cooler for many months and you tried visiting different shops in your city area
finally
 one day you got a cooler of your choice and you definitely liked the
quality
 of the cooler and you purchased it from the seller. Whenever
people
 visit your
houe
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house
 and when their eye catches
this
product
, they ask you different questions regarding
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the
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product
 like from where you purchased it and what is the price of the
product
, even
you
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if you
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also
 want to buy it. Like
this
, advertising is happening automatically. Having more consumers attracted towards a specific
product
, does not need advertising. If the
quality
 of the
product
 is good
then
people
 will automatically get attracted towards
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the
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brand.
People
 themselves become an advertisement of the
product
 because they are going to give
the
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feedback
of
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on
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 the
product
 to other
people
 who have asked about it. In conclusion, good
quality
 products do not need any type of advertisement, the consumer will automatically buy the
product
 based on the feedback it got from another consumer.
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