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people choose their own life partner.what are the advantages and disadvantages of each system?In some culture the parents arrange marriage for their children but in other

#people #life #partner #system #culture #parents #marriage #children
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Marriage is a momentous event in the
life
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 of one human and
its
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it's
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 important for the whole family as well.And having
good
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,understandable and caring,
life
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partner
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 provides you
mental
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with mental
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 and physical support.As
its
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it's
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 an important decision in a person,
s
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's
life
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 .There are two aspects
for
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to
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this
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 ,one is that the individual
select
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selects
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 his
partner
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by
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on
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 his own and still there
societies
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are societies
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 where
parent
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parents
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 arrange marriage for their children.
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,those who select
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partner
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a partner
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by
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on
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 their own.So they personally know that person
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therefore
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,they have
good
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 level of understanding,so there is a probability that they can live a happy
life
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 together.The ones who
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 for
such
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 types of marriages
also
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know
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knows
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know
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 about the family
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background
backgroud
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background
,financial conditions and the norms and culture of each other,so for both
families
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families,
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 it would be easier.
And the
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 drawback
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of
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for
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of
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such
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types
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type
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types
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 of
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marriage
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marriages
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marriage
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 is that there
a
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lot of people in
this
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 world so,to find that one person
that’s
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 difficult.And is most
of
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the
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apply
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cases they ditch each other
hence
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,trusting someone
maybe
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may
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 hurt breaking as well
secondly
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,the case in which parents arrange
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partner
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partners
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 for their children.
in
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this
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secenerio
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scenario
 parents
goes
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go
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 for marriages in their caste.So they know each other personally and they have a good bond
between
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with
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 each other
form
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from
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ealier
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earlier
time
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times
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.They have
comman
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common
command
 norms and rules.so
its
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it's
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 for both parties. The drawback for
such
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situation
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a situation
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 is that if the understanding between partners
don’t
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 match
then
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 there will be clashes between them.So there will be fights and people of
same
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the same
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 family will disrespect each other.
According to
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 me about selecting
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partner
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a partner
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 by
your self
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yourself
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 and
parents
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having parents
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arrange
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arranging
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marriage
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a marriage
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 for you,both have
positive
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a positive
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 and negative
aspect
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aspects
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.So in my opinion
childen
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children
 should be given
right
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the right
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 to select their
partner
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.As they are going to spend their
life
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