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many people like to wear a fashionable clothes. What is the reason for that, do you think this is a good or a bad thing?

#people #clothes #reason
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Majority
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The majority
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 of individuals now a days would love to wear branded
clothes
 , For many
resones
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reasons
 two of those
resons
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reasons
were
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are
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 it makes them feel like extra wellthey so it
reflict
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reflect
reflects
 their porsh
life style
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lifestyle
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, Because of the high quality , lets
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me explane
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explane
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explain
this
 more and offer my opinion as well.
Firest
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,
Alot
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a lot
 of people like to look rich and glamorise like high
schools
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school
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tennagers
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teenagers
and in their mind if they got
this
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these
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 branded
clothes
 means they can buy whatever they want because
thats
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that's
that
 men
they
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apply
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have a good income and they can spend money freely so their friend would stike around them for material things
for example
 , teenagers in
privite
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private
 schools
loves
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love
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to buy fashionable
clthees
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clothes
 to give their
frinds
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friends
impration
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imprison
 about been
welthey
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wealthy
 kids .
Also
 another
resone
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reason
way
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why
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 a
big
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large
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 number of people would
preferred
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prefer
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a
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apply
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fashionable
clothes
, Is because of the good quality that most of them
made
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are made
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off
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of
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meking
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making
 them Feels
batter
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better
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 on
skin
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the skin
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 specially for individuals who have sensitive skin and can not wear any unknown random fabric .
for
example
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example,
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 young
womens
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women
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with skin issues
tand
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tend
 to wear from
zara
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Zara
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clothes
 shop because of their good
qulity
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quality
.
At
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In
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 the end , the number of people who likes to wear
a
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apply
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fashionable
clothes
 is
incresing
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increasing
everyday
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every day
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due to
 the fact that it
give
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gives
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 them the feeling of
been
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being
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 wealthy
also
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and also
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providing
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provides
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 a good
qulity
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quality
.
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