Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
think that
history
is not essential to
study
.
However
, their opponents think that learning the past helps them know today.In
this
essay, I will discuss both
point
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of
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view
and try to draw some
consclusion
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conclusions
conclusion
. On the one hand, there
some
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sound
reasosns
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reasons
why a number of
people
still think
history
studying is boring.The main argument is a waste
time
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. to explain, most
people
memorise dates,
name
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names
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and
fact
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when they
study
history
.
This
information is not
usefull
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useful
in life and
future
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the future
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.
In addition
, they prefer
study
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new science and technology to the lives of dead
people
.
On the other hand
, despite
mentioned
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counter arguments
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, it is thought by others that it is the
study
of past
event
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events
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, building
better
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a better
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future
. They think
this
true
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is true
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mainly
due to
the fact that it shows
example
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of
behavior
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or events in the past and
outcome
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. which can
helps
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us
prevention
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similar outcomes in the
future
. In my opinion, I rather studying
history
. We can’t step in the
future
without
history
, because
history
teaches
people
what their forefathers experienced and suffered in the past in order to make their country what it is today. In conclusion, valuable information can be found in
history
,
such
as traditional
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medicines
medicine
but not
interested
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to some
people
, though some are very buff.
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