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The maps provide information about modernization of the coastal village of Seaville between 1980 and 2010.

The maps provide information about modernization of the coastal village of Seaville between 1980 and 2010.
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The maps provide information about
modernization
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the modernization
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 of the coastal
village
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 of Seaville between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, what stands out from the diagrams
are
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 that
retirement
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a retirement
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village
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 has been constructed
on
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in
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 the
center
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centre
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 of the coastal
village
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,
while
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 the Marsh and
holiday
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cottages
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 have been replaced by permanent houses. Looking at the details, The Marsh,
holiday
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cottages
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 and hotel
had
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were
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 situated
in
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on
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 the west side of the
village
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 and they
had
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were
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 surrounded by a road in 1980. Along the
pathway
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 many trees had
planted
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been planted
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on
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in
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 the woodland area. The river had extended from the north part of the
village
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 to the east bank. There were tea
room
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rooms
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 and sand dunes. With regard to
current
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the current
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 layout, the Marsh and
holiday
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cottages
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 were demolished to make way for permanent houses and
hotel
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the hotel
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was
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apply
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remained untouched in 2010. Woodland was removed for
opening
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the opening
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 of
new
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the new
a new
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 facility,
with
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apply
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including
golf
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a golf
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 course. The retirement
village
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 was located
on
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in
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 the
center
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centre
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 of Seaville,
whereas
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 the boat club was built next to the river. The new road was extended from the retirement
village
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 to the east bank. The tea room was converted into
the
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a
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 restaurant and the sand dunes
was
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were
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knock
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knocked
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 down. The new hotel was constructed in the south part of the
village
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. The
holiday
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cottages
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was
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 carried to the southeast.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, holiday, cottages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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