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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this stetement?

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It has been argued that in
coming
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 generations there will be no printing
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newspapers
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of newspapers
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instead
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 e-
books
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 will be available. I
am totally disagree
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totally disagree
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 with the statement
as
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that
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 reading
books
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 and
newspapers
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 is a hobby for some individuals. To commence with,
books
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 and
newspapers
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plays
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play
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 a crucial role in
people
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's
life
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lives
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.
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, many
people
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 go to the cafe's and they sit there just to read a book
while
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 having their coffee. whenever
people
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 go to their office by public transport, they spend their time
in
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apply
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reading the newspaper till they reach their destination. I believe online platforms cannot replace
the
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apply
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books
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 and
newspapers
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 because
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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enjoys
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enjoy
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 them. Most old age
people
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 and businessmen
prefers
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prefer
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 the newspaper as a physical copy because they like to read it in the printed version rather than reading it from the screen.
Secondly
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, what about those
people
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 living who
depends
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depend
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 on selling
of
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apply
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books
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 and
the
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apply
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newspapers
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.
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?
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 They will become unemployed and society will not accept them.There are some magazines and they contain some special events which you can only read if you buy it from the seller. Even on
internet
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the internet
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 today, you have to pay some amount to read e-newspaper and e-
books
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,
then
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 only you can download it. Some
people
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's pay depends on
this
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 and we cannot have
future
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a future
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 where
books
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 and
newspapers
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 are available only online. It cannot be replaced because it is a tradition going on for many years.
To conclude
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with
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apply
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, I would say
books
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 and
newspapers
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 cannot be replaced with online platforms as
it
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they
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plays
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play
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 an important role in
the
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apply
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society.
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Task Achievement
Consider including a wider range of arguments and examples that reflect a balanced view, especially when you strongly agree or disagree. It helps in demonstrating the ability to understand the complexities of the topic.
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Enhance your essay by developing your points more fully. While you've provided examples, deeper analysis and more detailed supporting information could strengthen your argument.
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Work on varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of vocabulary. This not only makes your writing more interesting but also shows a higher level of English proficiency.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clarity in your argument by directly addressing the prompt in your introduction and conclusion. This helps in maintaining focus and making your position clear from the outset.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in organizing your essay coherently.
Task Achievement
The use of examples, such as people reading in cafes and using public transport, effectively supports your main points.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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