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The charts below show the parts per million of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere and the average temperature of four cities from the year 1750 to 2000.

The charts below show the parts per million of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere and the average temperature of four cities from the year 1750 to 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide in the air,
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 the bar chart depicts the mean
temperature
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 of four different metropolises, namely Seoul, London, New York, and Los Angeles from 1750 to 2000.
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, there was a significant rise in the volume of carbon dioxide, and all cities experienced an upward trend in
temperature
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, except for London. As can be seen from the line graph, the carbon dioxide concentration went up steadily from just 270 parts per million in 1970 to 280, before surging to around 355 parts per million by 2000. Regarding the bar chart, Los Angeles had the highest average
temperature
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 among the cities in question. The city's average
temperature
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 increased by 5
degrees
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Celsius
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, from 18
degrees
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 in 1850 to 23
degrees
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 in 2000. New York and Seoul followed a similar trend, with their temperatures rising steadily from 12 and 13
degrees
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Celsius
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 to 14
degrees
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 in 1950, before increasing to 15 and 16
degrees
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Celsius
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 respectively in 2000. Meanwhile, after several notable rises during the first 100 years, London's
temperature
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 level decreased slightly to approximately 12
degrees
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Celsius
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 in 1900 before remaining stable until the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, degrees, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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