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The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000.

The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different continents between 1930 and 2000.
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The line graphs depict the
literacy
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 rates of North
America
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,
Asia
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, and
Africa
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 between 1930 and 2000.
First,
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the
literacy
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rate
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 in North
America
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 was the highest, which was approximately 70% in 1930.
However
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,
this
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rate
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 remained stable from 1970 to 1999 at about 83%, still the highest
rate
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 among the three continents. Interestingly, the gap between
literacy
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 rates in North
America
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 and
Asia
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 was wide at the beginning of the year, but it had narrowed in 2000,
then
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 the
literacy
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rate
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 in
Asia
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 exceeded the
literacy
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rate
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 in North
America
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. It is
also
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 clearly seen that the
literacy
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rate
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 in
Africa
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 was the
least
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lowest
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 throughout the period. The
rate
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 increased considerably from less than 20% in 1930 to around 32% in 1950.
Then
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, the
literacy
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rate
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 in
Africa
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 rose slowly from 32% in 1960 to 40% in 2000.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
literacy
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rate
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 in
Asia
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 had a significant rise from 1930 to 2000, the
literacy
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rate
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 in both North
America
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 and
Africa
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 increased relatively steadily during the same period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, america, asia, africa, rate with synonyms.
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