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Student today can access the information online so libraries are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student #access #information #libraries
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In the era of technological advancement, various
information
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 available at our fingertips and access to knowledge has been readily available since one can remember. With
this
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 in mind, some people argue that there is no need to maintain the existence of public
libraries
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 as
information
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 is now available online.
However
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, others think that public
libraries
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 are still needed. I completely agree with the latter; I believe public
libraries
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 are still important for our society. There are several reasons for my position above.
Firstly
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,
books
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 that are available in
libraries
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 are
books
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 that are written by reputable authors, which means that all knowledge, research and
information
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 provided in these
books
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 are accurate and can be held accountable.
On the other hand
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, the sources of
information
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 provided on the
internet
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 are unknown and every person, be it recognized authors or even untrusted sources, can write anything on the
internet
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.
Secondly
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, public
libraries
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 become a place to find a community, especially for those who love reading and discussing the content of the
books
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. There are many reading communities that are available in the
libraries
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 that one can join.
In contrast
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, the
internet
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 does not offer
such
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 an advantage. Some people may argue that it is more practical to use the
internet
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instead
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 of going miles away to visit a public library.
However
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, if we see it from another perspective, in fact, public
libraries
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 provide a one-stop-solution service to people who want to do research. Everyone can only visit one public library and obtain all of the
information
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 he/she wishes for, be it
books
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, research papers, journals, magazines, or even children's
books
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. In summary, I am of the view that public
libraries
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 are non-replaceable, even with the advancement of technology nowadays because
libraries
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 offer some advantages, that are the credibility of their resources and the community inside them.
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