In many countries, the quality of life in the large cities is worsening. What possibly can cause this problem? What measures can be taken to resolve it?

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, the standard of living is falling in large towns, which is making
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inferior. There are several
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but mainly because of pollution, and
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.
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, various nations are facing some
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which
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making
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life
worse by
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and because of that pollution is soaring day by day which is directly affecting common
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, Pakistan
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rice to other
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and
due to
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and
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industries are
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with new
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of civilians. The possible outcome of
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interference
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can
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time limitation.
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common issue is
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consumption of
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people
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food
which is making their health
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worse with less
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young
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enforce
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and once they intake it
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consuming
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of foods
due to
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solution
of
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this
problem
government should use
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. In conclusion,
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getting worse by consuming inferior goods and living in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Housing shortages
  • Rental and property prices
  • Traffic congestion
  • Public transportation
  • Deforestation
  • Urban sprawl
  • Mental health
  • Economic disparity
  • Waste management
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
  • Recreational areas
  • Wealth gap
  • Cost of living
  • Lifestyle
  • Stress
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